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Chroma to Join Ozone Esports?-?Report


Okey Dokey, this article reads like it was edited by a toddler and sourced by the Info Wars news team.

So let's fix it piece by piece for the sake of shit-posting :).


Tension rises in the Ozone camp after disputes of the lineup are to take place.

Quote from LACH1E on the 17th of January 2019


In the title we already have a problem. The phrase 'tension rises' is in the present tense, the word 'after' alludes to the past tense (or an event in the past referenced in the present tense) but is followed by a reference to an event in the future. Additionally the use of 'of' is wrong, the word 'within' could be used or the sentence could be rephrased.

An alternate title could read:

Tensions rise within Team Ozone following roster disputes


Recently there have been rumors surrounding the team and whether the lineup will change players.



The writing in this is just sloppy. Firstly, when you are referencing something for the first time, you always use it's formal name. In 'the team' and 'the lineup' this writing convention is blatantly ignored.

Cleaned up this could read:

Team Ozone as of recently is surrounded by rumors about its lineup and possible roster changes.

Structurally, this doesn't make much sense, but it doesn't hurt to clean it up, you'll see that as a recurring theme in this article.


At the start Liam 'KreePz' & Mark 'taxxx' were planning to form a team with Jack 'ChromaAU' and Jaxin 'xyZ' two weeks ago.



It goes without saying that this line is a grammatical minefield, but I'll try and defuse it. Firstly this line and the lines following it are structurally stupid because these are not rumors, this article doesn't try to craft a timeline out of snippets of information like a piece of journalistic writing, this tries to explain a timeline of events, justifying each event as a rumor. This line and the lines following it display that but again, we'll fix it anyway. The phrase 'At the start' is indefinite which is fine but the phrase 'two weeks ago' implies either that an event happened two weeks prior to 'At the start' or two weeks prior to the current date. Given the context we can determine that 'two weeks ago' defines the start making the phrase 'At the start' redundant.

Fixed, the whole phrase could read:

Two weeks ago, at the beginning of the Team Ozone dispute, plans were made by Liam 'KreePz' & Mark 'taxxx' to form a team with Jack 'ChromaAU' and Jaxin 'xyZ'.

Its worth noting that this wasn't actually considered seriously by KreePz, who would've In-Game Led such a team.

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After this point I've stopped correcting Grammatical Issues where the sentence makes no sense in the context of the article, this section is more about the sourcing.
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The plans for that team have fallen through with rumors now centering on taxxx leaving to join a roster with ChromaAU if he doesn't replace Eddie 'Tekr'



The proposed removal of Tekr is fairly haphazardly put in at the end of this sentence to introduce the issue, it needs its own section. Being unrelated to the subject of the article, the information about taxx leaving would've been more useful later in the article... that is if it were true. the source on Kelpie's end was Chroma, according to taxx, the information given (by Chroma) was blown out of proportion by Chroma.


There are also rumors that if Dan 'MacgyveRR' disagrees with the removal of Tekr, the rest of the Ozone roster will force them out getting ChromaAU and another player into the team.



To clarify, taxx, KreePz and nexar wanted to replace tekr with ChromaAU, when MacgyveRR made his disagreement known, the plan was abandoned. Grammatically this is fine for the most part other than where MacgyveRR and Tekr are grouped together as 'them' unclearly.


It is currently unknown whether Tekr will stick with MacgyveRR if they get forced out, or who will become the fifth member within the team if this does take place.



No roster changes are taking place.

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Professional Journalists at the moment are pressured to write up to two articles an hour which has led overall to an increase in the poor sourcing and poor writing that characterizes the news outlets of the current day.

Amateur Journalists have the luxury of time to check sources, write well and edit well. In this article, this advantage is squandered in favor of laziness.

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The article in full:

Tension rises in the Ozone camp after disputes of the lineup are to take place.

Recently there have been rumors surrounding the team and whether the lineup will change players. At the start Liam 'KreePz' & Mark 'taxxx' were planning to form a team with Jack 'ChromaAU' and Jaxin 'xyZ' two weeks ago. The plans for that team have fallen through with rumors now centering on taxxx leaving to join a roster with ChromaAU if he doesn't replace Eddie 'Tekr'. There are also rumors that if Dan 'MacgyveRR' disagrees with the removal of Tekr, the rest of the Ozone roster will force them out getting ChromaAU and another player into the team. If the team decides to stick together taxxx is likely to leave and make a team with ChromaAU. At the moment MacgyveRR has denied all requests for a roster change and has stuck with the British AWPer. It is currently unknown whether Tekr will stick with MacgyveRR if they get forced out, or who will become the fifth member within the team if this does take place.











5 months ago

Chroma to Join Ozone Esports?-?Report

The people within the team, people surrounding the team, friends of people in the team, the organization and if there are any supporters of the team.
5 months ago

Chroma to Join Ozone Esports?-?Report

If I get any more information I'll report it.
5 months ago

Chroma to Join Ozone Esports?-?Report

smhing my head
5 months ago

Chroma to Join Ozone Esports?-?Report

It's always lurking.
5 months ago

Chroma to Join Ozone Esports?-?Report

Well, why would you?
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